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THIS IS A STORY PLEASE READ IT AND GIVE ME FEEDBACK
27 Nov 2020 17:29 by
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Please read the story below and tell me what you think. This is supposed to be a sequel for The Cask of Amontillado by Edgar Allan Poe, and this is an assignment for English class.
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“I still can’t believe that Jesse dared us to do this,” Jenn groaned as they walked along in the darkness. “He didn’t even give us a flashlight.”
“It’s not as bad as it could be,” Aleisha replied. She knew that he could have easily dared her to come alone. The catacombs were creepy to her, and she was glad for company.
“Well, at least I came prepared,” commented Tavish as he produced a rather large flashlight from his backpack. He turned it on, and Aleisha let out a sigh of relief.
Where they were, she could see bottles and large containers of what appeared to be wine lining the walls. They were all shapes and sizes, and she guessed that they were all from various years.
They continued on, and she noted that it was getting harder to breath. There was water dripping at some places, and she guessed that they were under the river.
“Oxygen,” Tavish began, catching her off guard, “diminishes as we travel further down. Back when they used torches, they would have almost died by…” his voice trailed off, and Aleisha noticed all the bones covering the walls.
They reached the end of the tunnel, and one of the walls appeared to be crumbling. Tavish walked up to it, and he was about to touch it.
“Wait,” Aleisha interrupted him, “this stuff is ancient. We were only dared to go to the end of the catacombs.”
“Don’t worry,” Tavish responded, leaning on the wall, “this wall is perfectly—” He stopped as he fell through. His flashlight fell, and Aleisha was frozen in shock by the skeleton chained to the wall. She felt Jenn grab her arm, and could hear her breathing really fast.
“What’s wrong?” Tavish asked, looking at them as if they were crazy. He turned to grab his flashlight, and Aleisha could barely control her laughter when she heard the scream that came from her friend.
“It’s only a skeleton,” Tavish stated, as if the previous incidents had never happened.
“We should really head back now,” Aleisha insisted, but her friend didn’t move. He’s crazy, she thought. She watched as he approached the skeleton, and she felt Jenn’s grip on her arm tighten.
“Okay, we’re going back now,” She put her foot down. They were in a creepy, old basement, they weren’t even allowed to be down there, and they had completed the dare. They had to get out of there.
“Yeah, just give me a second,” Tavish called over his shoulder, and Aleisha thought he was going crazy from the lack of oxygen, if that was possible. She watched as he inched closer to the skeleton, and the grip on her arm disappeared.
“I’m going back. You guys are scaring me,” Jenn whispered, and she ran off back towards the entrance. Aleisha looked back at Tavish, and didn’t have enough time to say anything before he touched the remains chained to the wall.
At the same time, Aleisha heard a scream and what sounded like a really big crack. Tavish turned around, but he couldn’t move. She looked down at his ankle, and it had somehow gotten chained to the wall.
“Part of me is thinking this was a bad idea,” he commented, to which Aleisha was astounded.
“You’re just thinking that now?” She replied, as she hastily tried to get the chain off from her friend’s ankle.
“Well, actually, I was thinking that this guy was murdered. Think about it: why else would he be chained to the wall? And why would the wall I fell through be so poorly constructed?” Tavish explained, and Aleisha just stared at him. She gave up on unlocking the cuff and just pulled on the chain, which, to her surprise, actually broke.
“We need to go find Jenn. I think she tripped over something,” She hurried him. They rushed back into the main tunnel, and they found Jenn, on the floor, beside a large cask that had fallen over.
“I think I did something to my ankle,” Jenn groaned, as Aleisha and Tavish helped her up. Aleisha wrapped her arm around her friend, and they tried to move as quickly as possible to the exit.
As they continued along, they thought they heard voices up ahead. Aleisha looked over at Tavish, and he turned off his flashlight.
“I thought I saw light coming from over here,” she heard an approaching voice say. It must be a tour guide, she thought. If they catch us, we won’t be able to go anywhere for the rest of the trip! That thought scared her, and she couldn’t help but think of the smug look on Jesse’s face if and when they got caught.
Aleisha felt someone grab her arm and bring her behind a barrel. She assumed it was Tavish, because there wasn’t anyone else down there with them. She helped Jenn beside her, and she heard footsteps approaching.
“Aleisha,” she heard a whisper, but she thought Tavish was beside her, but it continued, “Aleisha, where did you go?” Now she was horrified, because she didn’t know who it was that was beside her.
The light came around the corner, and peering over the barrel, she could see Tavish standing there. The guides were right there, and he was just standing there in the middle of the tunnel. What is he doing? She wondered.
“Hey kid, what are you doing down here?” one of the guides asked. Don’t say something stupid, Aleisha hoped, because it was bad enough that they got caught.
“Well, you see, I was working on a research project, and I thought I could just—”
“Kid, rules are in place for a reason. You could have gotten hurt. Next time you want to come down here, you just need to ask us,” the guide interrupted. “We would have brought you down here.”
Aleisha was stunned, and she turned to the person next to her in excitement, but when she saw his face she froze. She was staring at a skeleton.
She watched as the skeleton stood up, and he… took off a mask? Aleisha was beyond confused, and just didn’t have the words to describe how she was feeling.
“Ah, Jim,” the other guide greeted the man? Could this have gotten any weirder? “What do you have to report?”
“Well,” Jim began, gesturing to Aleisha and Jenn to stand up, “One of these girls is hurt, but I think these kids have solved a case that remained unsolved for a couple centuries.”
Aleisha stood up and helped Jenn walk over to the guides, still majorly confused by the whole situation.
As if reading her mind, Tavish asked, “What case? Did that have to do with the wall that fell?”
“First of all, technically you broke it,” Jim commented, “but then again, that is technically our fault for not keeping it up to code. But, there was a man who went missing in the late sixteen hundreds, and it was rumoured that the owner of this palazzo at the time was the last person to see him.”
Aleisha gasped at the news, but it was quite the shocker.
“Let’s get her out of here,” the first guide, motioning to Jenn. The entire group kept chatting about the history of the palazzo as they left the catacombs. By far, Aleisha thought, this had been the most eventful part of the entire trip.